Okay I've listened to this again. A couple of things occur to me.
1) This track is very Tom Lehrer-esque. I've said this before about some of the stuff in Sad Max. But this is approaching if not SURPASSING "Lobachevsky". Some of your stuff is Jonathan Coulton-esque. THESE THINGS ARE GIGANTIC COMPLIMENTS. I DO NOT SAY THEM LIGHTLY. I AM OFTEN KIND OF MEAN.
2) Pursuant to point 1, I'm not sure you realize it, but you are recording a comedy album. This may require tweaking the songs slightly to end verses with punchlines.
3) Pursuant to point 2, comedy albums must also be performed live. THIS CAN BE DAUNTING BUT ALSO VERY LUCRATIVE.
4) Pursuant to point 3, you will need patter to introduce each song in a live performance. This must also be funny. Don't underestimate the importance or difficulty of this. EVEN ELVIS WAS NOT VERY GOOD AT PATTER.
FOUR things. Four things occur to me.
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