As any young person who discovers the world of fanfilms decides, I wanted to make an epic feature length Star Wars fanfilm for next to no budget. Mine was called 'Dark Vengeance' (originally Revenge of the Sith, but then I changed it to get rid of the dreaded 'of the') starring Owewa Skywalker, a complete Mary-Sue character, and his friends from the Jedi Academy.

I got a guy from TFN to agree to write the script for me, but it never came into fruition. He did send a few pages, but I'm doubtful he ever wrote the full thing. Anyways, I found the 'treatment' that I sent to the guy for him to base the script on and I thought I'd share it with you guys. Bare in mind, I was probably about 12 when I wrote this, so yeah...brace yourselves.

STAR WARS
Episode VII

DARK VENGEANCE

(opening crawl)

The Rebellions ambition of restoring the Old Republic has come true, many star-systems have converted back to the Republic and any trace of the Empire is gone.

Luke Skywalker, Jedi Master has started a Jedi Academy on Yavin IV. Luke has been on a expedition to the mysterious planet of Korriban. He has found out something disturbing.

Luke is now racing home aboard his starship to get back to Yavin IV; he is the only one that knows the mystery of Korriban. Awaiting his arrival home are his wife and children....

The camera pans down to Yavin IV and you see two X-Wings coming out of lightspeed then a Rebel Blockade Runner (the X-Wings are guarding it) the 3 ships go down to Yavin IV. The camera turns and you see a Sith Infiltrator stalking them. Inside the Infiltrator you see a cloaked man with a helmet on (Darth Kaine), a voice (Darth Kyrouge) on a comlink calls Kaine. He asks if he has found Skywalker , Kaine replies yes and asks if he should continue with the assasination, Kyrouge tells him to and then Kaine replies eeriily 'Yes, my master....' You then see the 3 Shps entering the atmosphere of Yavin IV and landing in a nearby forest, the Sith Infiltrator is nowhere to be seen. The X-Wing pilots come out of there ships and stand by the descending bridge. Inside the Blockade Runner, Luke Skywalker is in his own little cabin, the captain then tells Luke that he has landed and his speeder is outside. Luke exits the ship after a talk with the captain and rides his speeder into a nearby city.

In the Jedi Academy two lightsabers clash together and one of the young Jedi (Jamaz) falls to the ground, it appears that he was duelling with Owewa. Jamaz tells him he doesnt have the right equptment to train with. Owewa asks Aayla who is walking by to help him with his saber techs but she tells him she is teaching someone else, she suggests that there 'students' have a small duel and Aayla and Owewa also have a duel. The duel goes on for a while untill Luke enters the academy.

There is gasping, cheering and the sounds of sabers de-activating. Everyone is asking Luke how his trip was etc etc, Luke is about to tell them about a disturbing thing when a small death star like beam assassinates him a small sound of metal hitting the floor is also heard. (Add more to the death of Luke and its effect on Owewa and the others please) Owewa is standing their still and white, eyes wide open while Aayla runs into a nearby room she runs outside with a object (Tracking Device), she sprints outiside the academy and see's the Infiltrator she throws the device at it and it bounces back at her, she stands their with a confused face on her.

After mourning and comforting Owewa, Owewa, Aayla and Jamaz walk to a room and turn on the 'HoloPhone'. Owewa says the address and Ben Skywalker answers he excitedly says Hi and then he realises the look on everyones face and looks concerned, asks questions but Owewa wont answer, he asks for his mum (Mara-Jade). See-Threepio walks into the screen and says that she will be here soon, She arrives and everyone tells her what happened and then the HoloPhone goes dead everyone looks concerned.

The Infiltrator is in Deep Space and Kaine realises a flashing light on the cockpit, he contacts Kyrouge and tells him he thinks hes been tracked, Kyrouge tells Kaine to get to Korriban immediatley. The Infiltrator then goes into hyperspace.

The trio exit the HoloPhone room and announce that the Academy will now be closed for a period of time. Once everyone has exited Jamaz picks up a small sattelite dish object off the floor, Aayla asks what it is and he replies its some sort of laser dark, he explains that it must have been used to kill Luke.

Owewa stands up and says he wants to find the murderer and kill them (needs dark side subtility).Aayla tells Owewa that it is hard to cope with but he has to calm down, she then tells Jamaz that this could be a clue to who killed Luke. Jamaz explains that when he lived on Tatooine his only friend studied cultures and that she might know the origin of this weapon. Jamaz runs to the hangar and Aayla and Owewa ask where he is going, he replies that he will look for his friend (Lasu Sara) right now.Aayla explains that she might not even live where she used to and asked hin to stay a couple more days to find out her known whereabouts. Jamaz says he doesn't need computers to find her, he can use the force. His large Y-Wing leaves the hangar and sets out for Tatooine. Aayla asks Owewa what to do now, he tells her to turn the computer system on and scan that Tracking Device on the Vehicles Databank, he also tells Aayala that he is returning home.

Owewa speeds home aboard his speeder and fiinally gets home. He shouts his family members when on the floor he sees his mother with a blaster in her hand and a bolt hole on her chest. Owewa also finds a suicide note on the floor. He reads it and starts to sinffle, he turns round and the two droids (Artoo & Threepio) are smashed on the floor. He speeds into a nearby forest and cuts some wood down with his lightsaber. He speeds back to the home and puts his mother and two droids in the speeder, when he gets back to the forest he cremates them. Owewa hears a noise, it is his brother Ben. They talk about what happened etc etc. Ben goes off and before he leaves he tells Owewa, May the force be with you.

The Infiltrator comes out of Hyperspace and the artifiial planet of Korriban is seen. A hatch opens up and the Infiltrator goes in. The Infiltrator lands on the planet. Darth Kaine walks out of the ship and heads toward a bunker. Droids that look like a cross between a stormtrooper and a battle droid aid him to a throne room. A man is sitting on a chair, this is Darth Kyrouge, Kyrouge asks why he has failed, Kaine asks how and Kyrouge tells him the Jedi know who has the details for the Infiltrator. Kyrouge punishes Kaine by zapping force lightning at him. Kyrouge then orders a droid to send him a bounty hunter.

Back on Yavin IV Aayla is scanning the Tracking Device on the Academy computers. Owewa walks in and asks if she has found anything, she tells him no, that the ship is unknown and its closest matches are the TIE vehicles from the Empire, but the ship never looked like any of the TIE's. Aayla decides to put a Information Needed ad on the Holonet. She posts it and Owewa says what now and she replies something like 'we will have to wait'.

Jamaz's Y-Wing cruises through the galaxy untill he finally finds Tatooine, he descends down and lands back to his homeworld, everything is so fammiliar but also different to him. He is now on his trek to Lasu. (Add some more to his journey) He walks for what seems to him like hours when it is only minutes, the twin suns although friendly to him are burning his skin. Jamaz then faints

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It is sunset on Yavin IV, Owewa is sitting ontop of a hill looking at the landscape of Yavin IV. Aayla walks over to him and they talk about Jamaz being ok, the breaking down of the Skywalker family and also the assasination of Luke. Aayla tells Owewa that they better stay in the Academy for the night so they can check things out on the Holonet about the ship etc etc. The two then go off to the Academy.

It is dark and silent in the academy. A Bounty Hunter (Kurakya) is in the academy. Kurakya takes out a small mine-like object. The Bounty Hunter presses a button what sets off a beep and awakens Aayla. Aayla runs out and see's Kurakya and the mine on the wall. She ignites her lightsaber and cuts down the mine. Kurakya takes out a small object that shoots out laser darts, he shoots them at Aayla, but she deflects them easily. Kurakya then gets in his speeder and races through Yavin IV's skyline, Aayla borrows Owewa's when he runs out, Owewa tells Aayla that he will go after him but Aayla refuses and their is a speeder chase between Aayla and Kurakya. When Aayla finally gets Kurakya she jumps out of her speeder onto Kurakya's and cuts off part of it so it falls.

Once it falls she asks why he was in the academy and what was he doing, he tells her this and then Aayla cuts off his arm and takes a comlink from the speeder, she then takes him back to the acadmey when they contact the Galactic Senate and ask for permission to put him under arrest, the senate agrees, later that day he gets arrested (but we don't see that on screen we only hear about it). Aayla takes out the comlink that she found and speaks down it saying the Bounty Hunter has been arrested and that whoever hired him is next.

On Tatooine Jamaz wakes up and see's huge mountains, he is in shock that he had moved from his original position, he stands up and realises that the mountains were just rocks. Jamaz walks more untill he sees a fammiliar sight, it is the street he used to live in and were he thinks Lasu still is.

He runs to the house he thinks she is in and knocks at the door. An Alien opens the door, Jamaz shouts something like you not Lasu, the Alien then speaks in an unknown language and Lasu comes to the door, she doesn't know who it is at first but then she realises that it is Jamaz, she invites him in and they talk about things. Jamaz then asks her if she still studies other cultures, she replies and then Jamaz asks her about the sattelite dish-like object, she tells him it is a Korriban Mini SuperLaser Prototype, she explains that it is a miniature version of a Super-Laser from the times of the empire used on the Death Star, Jamaz asks where Korriban is, Lasu then asks Konnichi-Su (the Alien) to bring her, her Galaxy map. Lasu turns on the HoloMap and points to its location near Yavin. Jamaz asked if he could use her HoloPhone she says yes.

He calls the academy on it and tells them the about the Super Laser and Korriban, Aayla checks the archives and it appears that Korriban is not listed, Jamaz asks Lasu why it isn't, she replied that it must be unknown or unfriendly, but she tell's Jamaz she'll take them. Jamaz tells the academy the news and they can't wait for him to return.

Owewa tell's Aayla that she better take off the Holonet ad about the ship because they now know where its origin is. Aayla tries but then finds out it had eerily already been taken off. After they talked they decided to contact Jamaz, they asked him when he will be leaving and when he will be arriving, replies he's leaving now and will be arriving sometime tonight.

Lasu asks Jamaz where he will be going, he replies Yavin IV and she replies shocklinly that they will be late because they would have to cross the Roche Astroids. Konnichi-Su tells Lasu in his Alien language to hurry up. Lasu Sara and Jamaz Baluri go out to the back of the home and climb onboard Lasu's ship a YT-2400 Light Frieghter. Konnichi-Su sets up the co-ordinates for Roche Asteroids, Jamaz asks Lasu why he is setting it for there, she replies that if they go through their in hyperspace the ship will be damaged. They leave Tatooine and go into lightspeed for the Roche Asteroids.

On Korriban Kyrouge is furious that Kurakya has been placed under arrest and then forsee's the trio of Jedi coming to Korriban, he orders all his droids to prepare for battle.

Back on Yavin IV, Owewa and Aayla are going through some training, they then stop and start worrying why Jamaz hasn't arrived yet, it is late at night.

In the Roche Asteroids the YT-2400 comes out of hyperspace, Lasu tells Jamaz this is where the fun begins, Lasu and Jamaz (with Konnichi-Su helping) start trying to navigate through the asteroid field blasting asteroids using their Turbo Lasers, this goes on for a while untill they get out and go through hyperspace to Yavin IV.

In the academy Owewa and Aayla are practising their sabers when a signal comes from the computer, a ship is approaching it had a message on it saying in aurubesh 'It's Jamaz Baluri, requesting permission to land in the Skywalker Jedi Academy 1138 hangar'. Owewa gives them permission, the hangar door opens and a YT-2400 comes though. The three get out of the ship, Aayla and Owewa lead them into the academy, they talk about whats happened and that they are going to infiltrate Korriban. They board the YT-2400 and set off for Korriban. While in space Owewa aks how far Korriban is, Lasu replies that it is one of the closest planets to Yavin so we don't need to go into lightspeed. You then see the ship cruising and a planet nearby in the distance.

In a new scene you see the YT-2400 uo close and then the camera turns round to reveal Korriban. As they approach the planet a hatch opens up. There is confusion in the YT-2400 as why this has happened Konnichi-Su suggests to Lasu that this maybe an artificial planet. The crew slowly enter the artificial planet, going through the hatch Jamaz looks up and see's a path going up but according to Lasu they should just go straight ahead.

In the Sith Bunker on Korriban a droid approaches Kyrouge and tells him a ship has landed on the planet, the droid thinks it is the Jedi, Kyrouge orders the droid to get all the droids ready for battle and that Kyrouge and Kaine will be waiting here for them aswell.

The Group have landed the three Jedi are armed only with their Lightsabers but Lasu and Konnichi-Su have Rifle-Blasters. They walk through the rocky planet searching. After a lot of looking they find the Sith Bunker. Inside the bunker the Sith Battle Droids are waiting although the group do not know this. Jamaz presses the button to open the door, when the door opens the group are cornered by alot of Sith Battle Droids, the droids start firing and the Jedi ignite their sabers while Lasu and Konnichi-Su start shooting, lightsabers are deflecting blaster shots, chopping up droids, this is a firing frenzy, once the group get past this first lot of droids, they think they are safe they walk up the corridor when another large group of droids appear, they keep on fighting and encountering more of these droids, whoever is in charge of this bunker must know they are here, but how?

After alot of fighting the group get to a staircase, more droids come down, Owewa spots a door to another room, he explains that it must be the place where whover is incharge is. Owewa tells everyone to go into that room. The others ask, what about the droids but Owewa says he'll worry about the droids and they should just get to this room. Lasu and Konnichi-Su stay with Owewa and the two Jedi run up to stairs dodging droids when Owewa gets shot by a blaster. Aayla screams OWEWA!!! She goes over to him and uses the force to heal him, she asks if he is ok, he replies that he is fine and tells her to go to the room. Aayla and Jamaz run up the staircase while Owewa, Lasu and Konnichi-Su handle the droids.

Owewa thinks it is a great time to use his new technique, a force ball. Blasters shooting, force balls blasting, Owewa, Lasu and Konnichi-Su are in a life-threatinging battle. Aayla and Jamaz finally reach the door, the door opens by itself sitting on a chair is Darth Kyrouge and beside him is Darth Kaine. Kyrouge says things like 'Well you have finally found us Jedi..', he then tells them that they will die. Kyrouge clicks his fingers for Kaine to fight, Kaine approaches the Jedi and ignites his saber. Jamaz and Aayla ignite theirs but Jamaz wants to do this alone. The clashing and banging of lightsabers goes on for a long time untill Kaine has Jamaz in a corner and then zaps force lightning at him and sends him across the room. Agrivated by this Aayla runs into the battle with her saber, the duel goes on for longer and even more intense saber battling has begun.

Back fighting the droids Owewa senses something and runs up to the stairs, Lasu asks him were he is going, he replies that he has to help.

In the throne room, the intense fight between Aayla and Darth Kaine is still in progress the clashing and bashing of lightsabers is going on for ages until Kaine chops off Aayla's arm and then zaps her using force lightning, this is a dark day for the Jedi. Kyrouge congratulates Kaine on his victory when the door opens. It is Owewa! Things are said like 'Another Jedi, how unexpected' or stuff like that, Owewa then says that they are murderous rats or something like that, they broke down his family and killed his father, he then glances over to the side and see's his two friends on the floor dying. He ignites his saber and leaps into battle with Kaine, After furious intense fighting Kaine force pushes Owewa over to his friends, he looks at them and remembers how Aayla helped him when he was shot. Owewa then heals the two of them and now a 3 on 1 battle commenses, or does it?

Darth Kyrouge steps up and tells Kaine that he will join this battle, possibly the most furious saber battle in history is about to commense. The battle goes on, Aayla using one arm to duel, Jamaz fighting to protect and Owewa aggresively fighting for revenge. After intense fighting, Kyrouge zaps force lightning at Owewa, but he absorbs it using a force ball and shoots it back at him with a force lightning ball. However Kyrouge deflects this using his saber and it shoots at Kaine and kills him. Their is a sigh of relief for the Jedi but Kyrouge looks angry but also quite glad that he had killed his fellow Sith. More intense saber battling commenses, Owewa distracts Kyrouge with a force ball and allows Aayla and Jamaz to strike him down, they strike him but only manages to cut off 1 of his arms. Kyrouge quickly runs away into the hangar, The three Jedi chase after him, but he boards the Sith Infiltrator and is about to take off.

The Jedi know they wont be able to catch up with him so they run out to Lasu and Konnichi-Su, they run out to the YT-2400 and quickly board it, they see the Infiltrator and start shooting it. The group think they have shot down the Infiltrator but it really dropped down to the nearby planet Ord Radama.

Cheering is going on in the YT-2400 when Owewa remeber Jamaz said he saw a pathway going up the artificial planet Korriban he suggests that they get a squadron of Jedi to destroy the planet. Jamaz asks why it needs to be destroyed and Owewa replies that it could still have some mysteries lurking inside. Everyone esle agrees and Lasu goes into lightspeed to Yavin IV.

In the academy a message is sent to a selected number of Jedi asking them to report to the academy immediatley. Jamaz starts spectuclating what the core of the planet could be like and makes a hologram of it. Small fighter ships are being brought in so the 'Jedi Squadron' could attack the artificial planet.

In the academy a meeting is on explaining battle tactics and showing Jamaz's hologram of the planet and how to destroy it also explaining that it will be tough because there is not any Astromech droids to repair the ships if damaged. This scene should be simmilar to the scene in ANH where there is a meeting going on explaining how to destory the Death Star. Everyone goes to the hangar and boards their ships and take off ready to destroy Korriban.

On Ord Radama, Darth Kyrouge has just had a artificial arm put in by a Medic Droid. He leaves the Ord Radama Centrail Medical Unit and gets in his Sith Infiltrator and sets off for Korriban. The Jedi Squadron come out of lightspeed and are right by Korriban. Kyrouge in his Infiltrator notices this and thinks it is just a group passing by.

Over the comlink each of the Jedi Squadron speak their codenames over the comlink (eg Jedi 5). All the ships then go into attack position and speed into the artificial planet. The hatch opens and Jamaz Baluri leads the way into the passage.
Kyrouge senses the force strongly in all of these ships and rushes towards them, he knows it's the Jedi and what they are there for. Over his comlink he orders the droids to get into their fighters and hold off the Jedi.

The Jedi go up the passage way that Jamaz had seen, so far everything he predicted on the hologram has been right. Through the comlinks on the ships there were comments going round like 'Why did you rush us just to do this, it's too easy'. Then herds of TIE Fighters controlled by droids approach behind them. Comments, curses and worries are screamed through the comlinks. TIE Fighter blasting, Jedi dying, ships getting banged up. It seems hopeless. The trench was very small and very tough to navigate through, finally after loads of blasting the trench had ended and a large hole going down started, the squadron went through it, it was an even larger trench but was still tough.

TIE Fighters were killing Jedi, Jedi were destroying TIE's. Almost all the TIE's where gone but there were less Jedi aswell. It was thought to be easier because there are less TIE's but storming through came Kyrouge in his Infiltrator! A lot of blasting and exploding was happening with only 4 of the original 30 Jedi left and Lasu and Konnichi-Su in their YT-2400. The Jedi Squadron finally reached the core of the planet, Jamaz tried blasters to shoot it but it never worked, how was they going to destroy Korriban? They were in a spherical room, dodging the TIE's and Infiltrator. There seemed to be no hope, each one tried to shoot it all at once using Ion Cannons, but they needed more ships and more firepower.

BANG! A ship came out of nowhere, it was a custom-made fighter a voice appeared on the comlink saying something along the lines of 'I'll hold off these fighters, concentrate on the SOLID PROTECTORS on the core!', Owewa recognised the voice, it was Ben his brother. He screamed down the comlink asking how he knew where they was and how did he get their so fast. He just told them to get on with what they were doing. 3 Ships were shooting the bottom part of the solid protector and the other 2 were shooting the top. Ben was shooting all the TIE's in the spherical room. Kyrouge locked onto Owewa's ship and was about to shoot when Ben shot him off course, Ben then helped the others with shooting the core untill the two sides collapsed onto the energy core, malfunctioning the planet. They had to get out before it was too late.

They zoomed through the trench and Kyrouges ship, spinning out of control finally got upright and chased after the others. Kyrouge was continiously shooting Ben's ship until the planet started exploding from the inside. The ships speeded straight out of the planet when it exploded. The 6 ships got out of the planet and the Infiltrator was nowhere to be seen.

The 6 ships went into lightspeed to Yavin IV. Once they get out of lightspeed the ships land in the hangar of the academy. There is cheering going on in the academy, talking between Jedi etc etc. After this a celebration is held in the academy, music is playing, people are dancing, hugging and having a laugh with each other, except for Owewa, who thinks that Kyrouge got away and is still there somewhere in the depths of space.

In deep space the camera pans down to reveal the Infiltrator, inside Kyrouge is talking to his droid saying that he must find another person to train to be a Sith with, but who?

THE END