Topic: So I've been writing a little something

I'm kinda reluctant to share this, cause, y'know, whatever. But I've been working on a little project for about … um … three years now, and I thought maybe I'd show you guys a piece of it.

I can't emphasize this enough: this is just for fun. I've been doing this just to amuse myself, no other reason. So if it sucks or you hate it, well — and I say this with love — go to hell.

Anyway. Here.

http://drop.io/rwffscg

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Re: So I've been writing a little something

Nicely done sir! Much much much more enjoyable.

Although if i want to get picky, the only thing that really stands out is the little schitck with the battledroids, (I wasn't programed to think) seems a little out of place/on the nose. I mean unless you're planning on doing something with it in the larger picture, it feels really weird.

Otherwise, really nice.

ZangrethorDigital.ca

Re: So I've been writing a little something

Agree with Maul entirely.

Fucking awesome, the battle droid bit caught my attention. Nicely done.

Teague Chrystie

I have a tendency to fix your typos.

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Re: So I've been writing a little something

Agreed with Maul and Teague.

Good read, interested to see where you would go with it.

Re: So I've been writing a little something

That's was cool. The droid corporal should have had his legs crushed and just disassembled the broken private to take his legs.

Also, those goddamned alluvial dampers. When is Galactic Motors going to provide a reliable replacement?

Warning: I'm probably rewriting this post as you read it.

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