Topic: Stories: Experience vs Spine vs Whatever the hell it is I'm doing

That's the best title I could come up with, sue me.

I've been trying to write some short films lately, nothing specific just write. And I find I keep coming back to the same central concept for them.

DiF has infamously pegged a Kubrickian style film as one that will just throw you in the middle of the action and allow you to just experience it for yourself. But DiF also talks a lot about having a spine for your movie, (That central theme or moral that your movie surrounds itself around). And when I'm writing I keep coming back to this whole idea of just throwing the audience into the scene and watching as the character goes through whatever events happen and watching them change and grow. But there isn't any real spine to the story, it's just watching this human being change by what's happening. (In one case the character starts off literally as a blank slate and as it progresses the character evolves out of the events she has to live through.

Is there any real merit to that style of storytelling or am I just bad at this?

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I don't think that every story needs to follow conventions. Go for it, it might turn out interesting.

"The Doctor is Submarining through our brains." --Teague

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I am, but I wanted to throw the idea up for debate. See what this rather large collective of filmmakers has to say on the subject.

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I've found the question "Why did someone tell me that story?" to be a useful metric.

And I'd suggest using literally correctly, unless the story is literally about a chalkboard.

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Yeah, well that's my point. That's the question you ask a Spine style movie, and the only answer I can give to that is "To watch this character grow and change." And I'm not sure if that's really worth anything.

And did you know what I meant, yeah, so fuck you.

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Watching a character grow and change is pure drama, which is hard. The characters have to be engaging, sympathetic, and relatable; they have to have chemistry together; and the story has to be either funny or moving or both. And it still needs some kind of conflict to get resolved.

The point of your particular story needs to be something like the character achieving fulfillment or independence or redemption or something and doing that thru growing and changing. Then you can say "this person grows and changes and, as a result, finds his place in life" or whatever. If your explanation doesn't have "as a result", then it doesn't have a point because it's not resolving a conflict, and you might as well be filming ants looking for food.

Check out a short film called Double Shot, where a character who seems to deserve no sympathy achieves redemption. The protagonist is conflicted about the direction of her life and gains hope and opportunity thru that character's act.

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I see what you did there, Mr. Double Shot.

Teague Chrystie

I have a tendency to fix your typos.

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Just write it. Get a first draft down to solidify the story.

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You mentioned Kubrickian stuff, which a lot of times the answer is a simple, "To make you feel x" where x could be hopeless/frustrated/ashamed/woeful, etc. If that's what you are going for, then cool. A fine reason for a piece of work.

There was a recent episode of Scriptnotes where they discussed the implications and phrase "Central Dramatic Arguement".

http://johnaugust.com/2012/the-happy-funtime-smile-hour

They mention a thread at some screenwriting forum that went on forever concerning the topic that Craig, a host, was involved in, which starts off as relevant by tangent and evolves to relevancy:

http://messageboard.donedealpro.com/boa … hp?t=65889

But if this is stuff you have an acute interest in, the best starting place I can recommend is Aristotle's Poetics. It's fuuuuuuulllllllllllllllllllllll of this shit.

http://classics.mit.edu/Aristotle/poetics.html


Regarding "literally", figured as a writer you would be interested in not fooling with words.  big_smile

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Zarban wrote:

Check out a short film called Double Shot, where a character who seems to deserve no sympathy achieves redemption. The protagonist is conflicted about the direction of her life and gains hope and opportunity thru that character's act.

So I watched it...and when I finished it all I could think was "Not sure if Zarban serious."

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The character doesn't change, and is hardly redeemed, if anything she just gains a reason to stop pretending to not be a bitch. And the only reason that happens is because she got extremely fucking lucky. I'll give you it happens because of her innate character traits, but it's not by anything she actually chooses to do. She's just sort of coasting through the short, being herself, and then suddenly hey, that guy actually is something you didn't think he was and that means you get the pot of gold...... And she gets to be the bitch she always wanted to be.

Not exactly the non sympathetic to sympathetic character arc you made it out to be. If anything it's basically what I was talking about of just being in the moment watching things happen. The only "Why did you tell me that?" reason I can find for that is "To watch this bitchy character get a job and become even more of a bitch."

So alright...

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But then I won't get the pot of gold from the super famous movie guy, cause obviously being an asshole is the only way to actually achieve anything.

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enough with the adverbs

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to fill out and be less of a jerk, the life of the guy that wanders in isn't obvious or actual. you can meet people like this in real life in LA. From any perspective, the point of the narrative is to chill the fuck out and be a little more kind to everyone, no matter who you are.

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BigDamnArtist wrote:

The character doesn't change, and is hardly redeemed

Curtis Armstrong is the character who seems to deserve no sympathy, then gains redemption by giving Amy Earhart an opportunity (moral: don't judge a book by its cover). Amy is the protagonist. She starts out outwardly irritable and conflicted about her life and, when she discovers the twist, becomes kinder and is freed from her conflict.

She doesn't just coast; she explains her goals and demonstrates self-confidence and a firecracker personality, which is perfect for his project. We should come away with the feeling that she'll forever be in Curtis Armstrong's debt and should be less of a bitch. The subtext is "You've got moxie!" and "Gosh, deep down, you're an okay guy. I'll never forget you."

Warning: I'm probably rewriting this post as you read it.

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Zarban wrote:

Curtis Armstrong is the character who seems to deserve no sympathy, then gains redemption by giving Amy Earhart an opportunity (moral: don't judge a book by its cover).

This I get, I misread your first statement as being about the same character, not 2 different descriptions of 2 separate characters.

Zarban wrote:

She doesn't just coast; she explains her goals...

1: The only reason we even know she's an actress is that he guesses it and she never actually confirms it, he stops her before then. And the only other hint of it we get is her little funny voice she does before he enters. But seriously, my kid sister does that and she's studying to be a librarian, so it's not exactly a huge clue in.
2:Before that all she does is let the guy use the bathroom and sit down because that's what her character would do anyway(She didn't know he was /Meridian/ at the time.). Granted when she does find out she goes into full suck up mode, but by that point he's already made up his mind, and she didn't have to do anything.

Zarban wrote:

She starts out outwardly irritable and conflicted about her life and, when she discovers the twist, becomes kinder and is freed from her conflict.

Zarban wrote:

We should come away with the feeling that she'll forever be in Curtis Armstrong's debt and should be less of a bitch. The subtext is "You've got moxie!" and "Gosh, deep down, you're an okay guy. I'll never forget you."

"Should" being the keyword. She discovers the twist, walks out the door and leaves a dead body in the diner, possibly mentally scarring her co worker for a good long time, puts on the sunglasses like she's already a movie star, waits for the scream, smiles, and walks away with a sarcastic comment. That's not a kinder person, that's a psychopath.

EDIT: I'm honestly not trying to be a dick, I just don't see it, and am trying really really hard to.

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Isn't every barrista in LA an actor? The point of leaving the cow-orker with the corpse was as payback for that person's treatment of her.

It's not perfect, just a clean story with an internal conflict, character development, and a point.

Do you want negative examples?
http://badstudentfilms.tumblr.com/

Warning: I'm probably rewriting this post as you read it.

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Well, it sure was interesting for me to stumble on THIS thread... I suppose I could just tell you what we were going for with Double Shot, but that'd be cheating.  smile

On the original topic, I don't think it's required for short films or short stories to have characters arcs or even plots.  They CAN, of course - but a short movie/story could just be about expressing an idea, or even just telling a joke, and get away with it.  Mostly because it's, well, short.   

But if a novel/feature film goes on too long without an interesting character or understandable plot for the audience to follow, the "why are you telling me this?" question comes into play.  "Geez, it's been an hour and I still don't know what the hell this is ABOUT!"   

Which isn't to say that it can't be DONE, and Tree of Life is a recent example.   It's mostly a series of images, and they're very pretty images, and I have no idea what any of it meant.  But it got a Best Picture nomination, so clearly there are folks who liked it just fine.

So if you have an idea then there's no harm in following it to see where it leads.   Just be aware that it may lead absolutely nowhere and if so, you put it in the trunk with all the other stuff that went nowhere.   On the other hand, it might work.  Or it might NOT work, but once you've gotten it all down you'll see a way to make it work.    Just gotta try it and see.

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1) I just wanted to say that I love the word "moxie".
2) that link is good, and there should be a much larger collection of that sort of thing.

I hope to god my friend never decides to upload to youtube the videos we made when we were in highschool. I would probably hyperventilate myself into an aneurism if that were to happen...

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Trey Stokes. A man for the people, and a man for the person.

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I dunno, it made sense a second ago.

Teague Chrystie

I have a tendency to fix your typos.

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Moxie needs more common usage, for sure.

http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0973844/

Find a copy of that if you can, it's a bunch of tops directors, all making shorts about what "cinema" means to them. The anthology was commissioned by Cannes for an anniversary.

Some are narrative, some are more experiential but it's a great exercise in all the different ways something can go and still work.

This is super relevant in my head, but I'm having a way hard time articulating why.

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